[CivicAccess-discuss] inviations? + tranlated letter + plans?

[Michael Lenczner]

i added this sentance.  it's not great - but I think that we have to
address the question of what we're asking them to do.  I don't want
them to feel that if they join the mailing list they are committing to
something.


"We're not asking you to decide now if you want to become co-founders.
Join us in discussion via the mailing list and the wiki and you will
be able to decide if and how this spaces reflects your work or values.
We will be launching COACID sometime in January."

please vet the last version here:

http://www.civicaccess.ca/wiki/Launch/Invitation/EnglishDraft

If it's okay with all of you then we have to re-translate to french.

notice that i filled out the bottom in terms of how to join coacid

mike

On 12/12/05, Tracey P. Lauriault <tlauriau at magma.ca> wrote:
> Niiice!
> I think I am getting closer to that Mort Subite bottle!
>
> below are mostly editorial suggestions.
> substantive mods appear in square brackets in para 3 & 4 - mostly to
> reduce repetitiveness, and to add the word democracy.
>
> I am done for the night! Ciao all!
> Tracey
>
> >-----------------------------------
> >Hi There,
> >
> >Stéphane, Patrick, Michael and Tracey would like to invite you to
> >become co-founders of a new civic engagement space - Citizens for Open
> >Access to Civic Information and Data (COACID).  We are contacting you
> >because we know that you have been thinking and talking about these
> >issues, have been actively engaged in related activities, and also
> >because each or you has unique expertise, knowledge and experience to
> >contribute to this type of activity (i.e. policy work, open source,
> >social planning, data access, technology development, mapping, etc.).
> >
> >
> >
> no change above
>
> >The motivation for this project is the belief that an open access to civic information and data along with new information and communication tools can encourage and support a more informed and engaged citizenship.
> >
> >
> slight edits
>
> >As citizens [who live in?] neighborhoods, cities, and provinces we are trying to contribute to the development of a larger community of practice around open civic data in Canada.  Civic information and data help us make informed choices as voters, by keeping government more transparent and therefore accountable.  [Elements considered essential in a democratic information society.] In addition these are the bits and bytes required to re-imagine, re-envision, visualize and critically analyze the communities we live in.
> >
> >
> slight edits & mods in square brackets
>
> >A discussion list and a wiki with some draft content have been
> >created.  A wiki is a collaborative tool that will host content and
> >resources discussed on the list.  [This mailing list and wiki exist to
> >help people with these beliefs and interests share their skills,
> >information, and resources and to support each other in relevant
> >activities and projects.]
> >
> >
> suggestion - delete the content in the square bracket as it repeats some
> of the content below and add the support bit below.
>
> >Please join the list and introduce yourselves, check out the wiki, share your ideas and interests, add content, introduce activities and projects that may need support and discuss issues you think are important from your unique and diverse perspectives.  We also think it would be beneficial and productive to temporarily discuss in a smaller group context thus we are asking you to collaborate in the formation of what COACID should be before we open
> >it up to the larger public.
> >
> >
> changed the first sentence by adding the support bit and minor edit in
> the last sentence
>
> >Collaboration is key in the creation of this space – so please feel free to make suggestions and modifications you think would be beneficial.  We look forward to developing this community with all of you.  See you on the mailing list!
> >
> >
> slight edit
>
> >Cheers
> >Stephane, Patrick, Michael and Tracey
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> >
> >
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